Friday, January 4, 2013

Halo - The Rookie - J.D. Coughlan


Panel 1: A team of Spartans exploring a derelict space vessel. There are four of them, weapons pointed in front of them, cautiously exploring. The rookie of the team, Bob-101, brings up the rear and his body language is more relaxed, not so professional as the others. The team leader, Owen-495, is in front.

BOB-101: When do we get to shoot stuff?

OWEN-495: Be quiet!

Panel 2: Owen-495 comes to a doorway and peers around it. Bob-101 can be seen a bit down the corridor behind him, peering up towards him/us. One of the other Spartans, Zack-200, is chastising Bob-101.

BOB-101: Is there something I need to press to reload, or--?

ZACK-200: You're supposed to be watching our six!

Panel 3: Two-shot of Bob-101 and Zack-200. Bob shrugs innocently, Zack is frustrated and looking forward, not at Bob.

BOB-101: Hey, I'm just asking.

ZACK-200: grumblegrumble Freakin' noobs...

Panel 4: Owen-495 and the other team member, Franklin-387, blasting their weapons through the doorway.

FRANKLIN-387: We're under attack!

OWEN-495: Fall back!

SFX: BLAM BLAM BLAM

Panel 5: The three experienced Spartans backing down the corridor, blasting at the off-panel enemy. Bob-101 remains nonchalant.

BOB-101: You know what, guys, I think I'm gonna quit, this seems too much for--

SFX: BLAM BLAM BLAM BLAM BLAM BLAM

Panel 6: Same, but Bob's head has been blown off by enemy fire. The other Spartans look round at him in surprise.

SFX: PEW-SQUELCH

END OF PAGE

Bob-101 is basically me whenever I try and play video games.

3 comments:

  1. Haha, very cute, JD. The dialogue from the first panel gave me the impression this might be the angle you were taking, and I'm really glad you did. This was a really fun mixture of in-universe canon and meta-textual video game playing. Really enjoyed it.

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  2. Grant really summed this up for me. The page works as both in canon and its own commentary on video game playing. I really enjoyed the back and forth between Bob 101 and the rest of the team. Very fun page.

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  3. This was more subtly meta than the above script, which worked just as well. I dug the last panel and the script had a kind of 2000AD vibe-- dark humour juxtaposed with extreme, glorious violence.

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