Thursday, January 10, 2013

Amalgam Comics – Juliet & John – Shaun Richens.


PAGE TWO & PAGE THREE DOUBLE PAGE SPLASH – 9 PANELS
Layout
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456 789


1. INT. A dingy bar New York City. DOCTOR JOHN STRANGE (John Constantine/Doctor Strange) sits at the bar drinking water from a whiskey glass. He has blonde hair with graying sides, he has a blonde version of Doctor Strange’s facial hair. He wears a white vest with an open Hawaiian shirt over the top, the shirt is blue, red and yellow. Over the shirt he wears Constantine’s signature trench coat. An old CRT Television hangs on the wall of the bar. We can’t see the screen. A balding barman GRANT stands behind the bar facing JOHN. Apart from JOHN and GRANT the place is empty.

         GRANT:
Everyday you’re in here John, and everyday you just have water. It’s not like I’m rushed off my feet in here so buy a damn drink will ya.

         JOHN:
         Booze is bad for my line of work.

         REPORTER (Coming from TV)
         This is your afternoon bulletin…

2. Close up on JOHN.

         JOHN:
         Hey turn that up Grant.

3. Frame filled by the old CRT Television. The picture is grainy. A young female NEWS REPORTER sits behind a desk, the New York skyline is the image behind her. A logo along the bottom of the screen reads DAILY FRONTLINE.
        
         REPORTER 1:
Welcome to Daily Frontline, channel six one six’s leading news outlet.
         (Link)
         REPORTER 2:
Earlier reports of a crash in the Hudson River have since been cleared up by local climate agencies as a downed weather balloon.
(Link)
REPORTER 3:
A clean up team is currently on site. In other news….

4. Cut back to close up on JOHN. A smirk on his face and an unlit cigarette hanging out of his mouth.

         JOHN 1:
         Bollocks was that a downed weather balloon.
         (LINK)
         JOHN 2:
         Hey you mind if I smoke in here?

5. Cut to close up on GRANT. He hangs his head slightly as if giving up on JOHN.

         GRANT:
         Sure, wouldn’t matter if I said no anyway.

6. Close up on JOHN’s hand, he holds his thumb and middle finger together ready to click them.

         SFX (Around his thumb.)
         Klik

7. Same as 6. However now a small blue flame has sprung into life in between his thumb and middle finger.

         NO COPY.

8. Same as 7. However JOHN now holds his cigarette in his other hand and lights it on the blue flame he holds.

NO COPY.

9. JOHN is taking a drag on his cigarette; he is looking down at the bar. A shadowy figure stands behind him. The shadowy figure rests a hand on JOHN's shoulder. 

         SHADOWY FIGURE:
         You really do need to quit Doctor Strange.

         JOHN 1:
         I wondered when you’d turn up.
         (Link)
         JOHN 2:
         A weather balloon? That the best you boys got 
         these days?


5 comments:

  1. Nice combination of elements, especially Constantine/Strange, and the continuing Juliet and John storyline has me intrigued.

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    1. I know I wanted Juliet to have a partner in this story who had some magical element as i wanted to play with both sci fi and fantasy as I go alone here. So Constantine and Strange gave me the perfect combo of power, wit and mood.

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  2. Your story continues to build, and my interest is building with it. I really appreciate the time you're giving to establish your characters and the world they're in. Instead of rushing right into the action, you're taking the time to inform the reader of the world they're getting themselves into, and I think it will be well worth the time and effort.

    Also, I can't imagine why, but I am quite taken with that bartending character of yours. Seems like good people for whatever reason...

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    1. Thanks for the kind words, I felt as I am planning on keeping these guys around for 52 pages I wanted to give them a few pages each to set themselves up.

      Haha I thought you may have a soft spot for the Bartender, he is good people. I am planning on naming a character after each thoughtballoons member as my story carries one. I just so happens that you got the gig severing one of my leading characters a drink. haha.

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  3. A nice continuation of last week's strip. Curiouser and curiouser.

    Nice combination of Strange/Constantine too. Plus, who doesn't want to light cigarettes with their fingers?

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