Sunday, November 4, 2012

The Plutonian - A Glass Darkly - J.D. Coughlan


SET-UP: Qubit recounts to his teammates a time when Tony encountered an evil doppelganger of himself, the Anti-Plutonian (essentially, Irredeemable's version of Bizarro). The Anti-Plutonian went on a berserk rampage before Qubit and Tony contained him.

Panel 1: The Plutonian and Qubit at a desk in a lab, intently discussing something. Papers and sophisticated equipment lie on the desk. Tony seems concerned. Note that this is a flashback, so he is wearing his old white costume and still has the floppy fringe.

In the background, the Anti-Plutonian stands in a glass tube. He is like a deformed version of Tony, in a crude version of his costume. He is angry, like a caged animal.

QUBIT (CAP): Tony and I spent hours coming up with a way of sending the Anti-Plutonian back to his home in the Anti-Dimension...

QUBIT (CAP): And while that is what we told everyone that we had succeeded in doing...

Panel 2: Reverse POV, over Anti-Plutonian's shoulder looking through the glass. Tony and Qubit now look at him gravely.

QUBIT (CAP): We found the humane solution to be impossible.

Panel 3: Qubit solemnly operates a control panel in front of the tube. Tony stands between Qubit and the tube, looking at the Anti-Plutonian. We cannot see his face, but the Anti-Plutonian looks down at him with rage, banging on the glass.

QUBIT (CAP): We both knew there was only one option for such mindless power. He would never really be caged for long.

QUBIT (CAP): I harmonised his anti-atoms, causing him to... to vaporise. I told myself he was never real to begin with, but...

Panel 4: Close on the back of Tony's head. There should be an outline of a reflection on the glass, but nothing detailed. The Anti-Plutonian still rages.

QUBIT (CAP): At the time, I assumed Tony was as heartbroken as I was over what we were doing...

QUBIT (CAP): But I know now that as he stared into the eyes of that monstrous beast...

Panel 5: Same as Panel 4, but now the Anti-Plutonian has been vaporised, leaving a wisp, and we can see Tony's reflection clearly. His face is screwed up in controlled anger, but a little bit of fear in his eyes too.

QUBIT (CAP): ...he saw himself.

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3 comments:

  1. The whole playing on the bizzaro Superman angle was a cool concept, and your use of it as a mirror to show the man the Plutonian would became played really well on the page with that nice visual motif at the end.

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  2. Really cool concept that you executed brilliantly here, J.D. A really nice way to pick up on one aspect of the Superman mythos that didn't appear in the series in a way that feels natural and fitting. Well done.

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  3. Panel 5 makes this page. Great visual.

    I'd argue that you maybe could have tinkered with the captions a little to make that final panel silent and have it really hit home. But this page still works either way. Good stuff!

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